Hello Classmates:
Today I´ll talk about a post from other partner, but first,
let´s see some details: The blog belongs to Valentina Ulloa and she has five
posts on there. The blog has a dominant color, the pink, in many tonalities, in
mixture with other colors like red, blue and yellow. The posts are in the
middle of the page, having a comfortable design to read. It presents five
photos in the five posts.
One post that I like of her it’s called "Cerro San
Cristóbal" and it´s about her experiences in the hill. The post has 162
words and I choose because I did the same post. I talked about the same hill
and my experiences there. It´s something in common that we have.
I must
review this post using the Revision Code:
“Today i'd (P) like to write about "Cerro San
Cristobal".It (P) is a Metropolitan Park, the most extensive in Santiago.
The view from the top is really amazing.You (P) can climb to the top riding
bicycle or doing trekking, or you (P) can even go in your car.
When I was a kid I visited this place a lot with my parents
(SM). The thing I liked the most was the cable car.I (P) was excited and
shocked how a cable car with an egg shape can FLY. Because that’s what I
felt... We flew over the city.I (P) loved this place.. I always ate an ice
cream after the cable car and my parents ate “mote con huesillo”, a Chilean
drink.A (P) few years ago the cable car was closed. And for that reason I
didn’t go to San Cristobal for years.This (P) year the cable car will open
again.Probably (P) it will not be the same feelings of when I was a kid, but
I’m so excited about that anyway”
The post
has just a punctuation (P) mistakes. But the other things are very
good.
I revised your blog Ricardo!
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